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Less than two full months after my first ever consultation for my adaptation of Dig Down, I was sitting down with the judge of another screenplay competition to delve into the analysis of my script. Here were the positives from that meeting:

They were complimentary of this website. This took my by surprise because I hadn’t included this website, or the email address associated with it, in any of my submissions, both to this screenwriting contest, or any of the other ones that I had entered. This told me that the judge I was speaking with had taken the time to research me online, and actually had to seek this website out, as the website with just my name was actually already taken by I believe an Icelandic DJ.

That he said it looked professional was also a pleasant surprise. I didn’t want to just slap something together when I created this, and took my time organizing how I wanted the layout to go. I also had noticed when looking at the websites of other writers that few actually had links to their books and where to buy them, so I had spent time making sure that any book had a link to its Amazon page to facilitate the sale if people were interested in them.

They also said the title was cool. This was more expected than the first compliment and I felt a sense of validation as I had spent time coming up with what felt like the right title, trying to capture a level of the desperation Rob would go through, as well as hint at the depraved events that would take place.

There was only a little bit of a setback when they said they thought the story might have to do with archeology…

The biggest positive for me was that the judge felt it has a real starring role, and could attract actors to want to play the part. This also felt like great validation, because I had shelved writing this story for years because the character of Rob didn’t feel right when I first came up with the concept of the story. I had originally envisioned Rob as a good guy who got in over his head with the wrong people, and that led to some of the heinous things he ended up doing. It wasn’t until I found out who Rob should really be that this story worked, and that the complexity of his character was able to take shape.

Unfortunately…this last positive happened at the end of the meeting. While it was good to end on a positive, and what I felt was the biggest positive of the meeting, this was a ninety minute consultation, and that left a lot of time to review the negatives in the script, which I will get into next time.

The second consultation for my script of Dig Down was set for the Tuesday after Memorial Day. I’d be going into the conversation after having three days to relax, while also being able to find time at my leisure to skim through the script and prepare for the meeting. I also took that Tuesday off, just to remove the distraction of work prior to the meeting, and allow myself a little more time to prep.

If you thought the combination of a) having the luxury of this pace to prepare, b) having already gone through one of these in depth looks at my script, and c) having it be about a story I’d already combed through several times, both by myself when I was writing it, and with my editor when I was bringing it to market, that all of this would put me at ease for this meeting, you’d probably be right with most people.

Unfortunately, I’m not most people.

When I first was scheduled for this consultation, I felt I was in good shape to discuss it. But as the meeting drew nearer, nagging thoughts started to creep in. Yes, I’d had a consultation already, and a very positive one…but that was over two months ago now. I was very familiar with the story, having written it in two mediums, but that had led to a lot of changes during the adaptation, and the revisions based off of that first consultation. I had taken notes during the first meeting, but it wasn’t until a few days before this scheduled second consultation that I had found the notebook I had taken them in. When I opened it, the pages looked warped, the ink and handwriting didn’t feel familiar, giving off a sense that this had happened so long ago.

That was a bit of a surprising feeling. It wasn’t that I’d forgotten plot points from Dig Down. I think I’d have to be separated from it for years before that would start to happen. But it was things that I’d discussed in that consultation, and even thoughts and insights that people who’d read the book had shared with me, that didn’t come back to me until I’d seen these notes. It gave an odd sense that even though I’d been through this before, I somehow wasn’t going to be prepared to discuss something that not only had I created, but that nobody could no more deeply than me.

Even with that, I went through the script alongside the judge’s notes I’d gotten just a few weeks prior. My intention was to take any of the comments they had made, good or bad, and record the number of instances and page numbers they occurred on, so that I would be able to address them if they came up in this conversation. I also made the same recordings of certain elements in the stories so that I could have some additional talking points to bring up during the call, my goal being to leave them with the undeniable feeling I know my story inside and out.

I did this more and more as Memorial Day weekend went on. They operated in California, so this was going to be an afternoon meeting for me, so this prep work became my main focus the morning of the consultation.

As the morning wove down to the afternoon, I would quiz myself on talking about some of my notes without referring to them, but would otherwise just sit and relax. I was following the same pattern for my first consultation, and that had been very positive.

Yet as the final minutes ticked away, I couldn’t shake the feeling that this second consultation wasn’t going to be.

It didn’t take too much to persuade myself that I was on the right track. As helpful as my initial script consultation had been, I only had the showing of one screenplay contest, which I had placed as a finalist, to grasp how well I had implemented revisions. And while it was helpful to know that my screenwriting had gotten an accolade, what was always nagging the back of my mind was the ambiguity of how well I had applied the notes I’d been given.

I was putting this step of my writing process on repeat, now looking to get feedback on the feedback, but at least I would know how I’d actually done.

The Santa Barbara Screenplay Competition was also offering a level of in depth analysis, at a similar level to what I had already experienced with the Page Turner Screenplay Competition. I felt I would actually have a leg up when it came to this consultation, as I’d already been through it before, and that this would allow the conversation to dig even deeper into the elements of the script. If the screenplay had already gone through a level of polish with one industry professional, that had to mean there were fewer weak spots left, right?

And that then the focus could shift to not really weak points in the script, but things that could be enhanced further. Right?

First, I had to get accepted into this consultation. Just like Page Turner, this competition wasn’t offering this level of analysis for free, but unlike Page Turner, there was the mention of limits. Only four of these were done a month. That made sense, if deep analysis was going to be performed, I’d want the reviewer to have the time to read through my script, compile their thoughts, so that I could get the most benefit from their guidance, and cramming as many of these into their schedule didn’t seem conducive to delivering on that value.

I just didn’t remember hearing the other competition mention this kind of cap. Also, if I was the fifth to apply for this type of consultation, what would that mean? Would I be scheduled for the following month? Would I have to reapply when the calendar turned over?

These questions roamed rampant when a week went by and I hadn’t heard back from the contest. They had been responsive when I first applied, first acknowledging my request for the service they offered, and then asking what days worked best for me because they were filling out their schedule. I had given them a couple of options, and had even ranked the days by preference.

After a week had gone by with no communication, I sent a follow up to politely inquire. While they said their schedule was already booked for the current week, they did ask about my availability for the following week. I was still a little concerned about why I hadn’t been part of this week’s scheduling, with the Scriptapalooza experience still fresh in my mind, but I responded with a couple more days along with a ranking of my preferences. My mind was put at ease when they scheduled me for May 30.

It was settled…it would only be a couple of days before I was going down the same road again.

On the one hand, I had reaffirmed Dig Down‘s initial score was on target. On the other hand, I hadn’t set out to do that when I had reentered the Santa Barbara Screenplay Competition. My goal had been to determine if I had applied the round of notes and feedback I’d gotten effectively, and the resubmission was meant to gauge that based on whether I scored higher or lower than the previous time.

A score one point lower, but generally the same, told me nothing, especially when I scored higher in some of the criteria being judged, and lower in others.

I tried to rationalize this to myself. Maybe it was because of the judges for the two separate contests. Yes, the scores were nearly identical, but I could see a whole host of reasons why I hadn’t seen the improvement, or even decline, I’d been looking for. Maybe if the first judge reviewed the updated submission – not that I’d expect or rely on them to remember it – but it was possible, and seeing the notes applied to it, maybe I could’ve scored higher. Maybe the second judge wasn’t a fan of the genre, and so even though it scored well, that could have held it back.

I looked to see who the judges were for both contests, and realized none of these scenarios were possible. As it turned out, it was the same judge.

This sent my mind reeling even more. Again, it wasn’t that the judge didn’t like it, it wasn’t that the revisions didn’t work for them. The script had done about the same when I was expecting that with the revisions I’d made off of the two and a half hour phone consultation would have improved it dramatically, or at least gone in a different direction enough to make it noticeable it didn’t work for audiences.

I wanted to get this judge’s perspective–and not just because he wasn’t scoring the screenplay as high as I would’ve liked. Because to me, this wasn’t an isolated incident, but part of a trend. Even Page Turner had only placed Dig Down as a finalist. And the judge there had wanted to see what I did with the revisions based on the phone call with him.

I felt in some way I’d gotten confirmation that Dig Down still needed some work done, but I didn’t have any direction on what needed to be addressed. Looking for possible solutions, I explored what was available to get comprehensive feedback again.

And the first thing to jump out to me was another consultation. This one over Zoom. And with the head of the Santa Barbara Screenplay Competition himself.

Hello everyone,

Just a quick interjection to the saga of my screenwriting journey that I’ve been chronicling for the past year…

Over this past weekend, February 1st to be precise, I just completed the first draft on a new screenplay.

I won’t get into too many details for now, and as is typical as part of my writing process, I’m going to be taking some time away from the story so that when I do return to it, it will be with fresh eyes. I’ll let you know when I do resume working on the script.

But, for those who have loyally been following along with all the twists and turns of my screenwriting journey, I will share the name of the screenplay I’ve been working on…

Every Outlaw Needs Tall Tales

I’ll continue to interject updates to this project within the timeline of my screenwriting process as they happen.

Until next time.

I had re-entered Dig Down into the Santa Barbara Screenplay Competition because I was familiar with the criteria and categories they used for scoring, and because I knew with the deadline only days away, I would get that feedback quickly. I had also done so because although I had gotten great feedback in my first round of contest submissions, I didn’t know how well I had implemented that advice. So when I get the scoring back for my script this second time, I was…

…disappointed.

What led to this feeling wasn’t that I had scored lower than the previous submission. Since my goal had been to see how well I incorporated the feedback and notes I’d received, my hope would have been to have scored higher, as that would have given me the feedback that I had done it well, and in that case, I would have felt more assured that the reason I had placed as a finalist in the Page Turner Screenplay Competition was that there was just another script that the judge’s believed in more. But, if I scored lower, that still would have been fine, because at least then I would have known I didn’t do a good job incorporating the notes.

The thing was, although I scored lower, it was only by a point.

This actually was worse than if I’d scored noticeably lower. At least that would’ve given me some direction, even if it was to stick closer to the original submission. Or, even if most of the scores were the same, and only one category was lower, I could at least address that by keeping that aspect closer to what my previous draft had been.

The problem for me was that I scored lower in about as many categories as I improved in. I dropped by a point in Pacing, Dialogue and Emotional Response/Investment. But I had risen two points in Concept/Originality.

This mixture of results also presented no easy solutions to regain the points I’d lost and improve the overall scoring of the script. I had originally scored a 6 on Concept/Originality, and believe I got it to an 8 by expanding on the backstory of what led Rob to this state–but in order to do so, that elaboration created more time between tense sequences, which I believe led to Pacing dropping by a point. This exchange was still a positive scoring-wise for me, but it illustrated how creative choices could work for me in one aspect, but against me in others.

I had almost as many questions as answers, and knew I needed to delve into this deeper before deciding what to do next.